Wednesday, 30 November 2011
Friday, 11 November 2011
Performance poet I liked, but style I didn't:
I genuinely thought the content was unbelievably well thought out. The rhyme flows really well and there is a definite rhythm to his performance... I just felt awkward watching some of it because he relies on crude language to stimulate his audience, and it brought me to question whether the performance would be as successful if these elements were removed. Personally I think it would, if anything make his piece more powerful.
The way his poem implodes works well - in particular the repetition of the line about the brown paper bag and the teacher, I just didn't think it was necessary for him to depend upon swearing. I understand that the tone of the poem is angry, which becomes even more apparent towards the end when he is throwing his right arm in the air with a pointed finger like a politician. It just didn't really work for me as it came across very clichéd, thus losing its impact.
Due to the above, I have learnt that the way you perform is extremely important in terms of engaging your audience and audience reception. I have taken a mental note of the fact that I did not like his aggressive style as it distracted me from the point he was trying to make; something which I feel must be avoided at all costs when performing poetry.
Carrie Rudzinski
As soon as I watched this I felt compelled to continue.
The line "Dear Stranger, If you hear this and think it could be about you, please don't stop listening" instantly draws you in and to question yourself "Will this poem relate to me" "will it speak to me as a person".
In addition, the speaker pleads with the listener to just listen which builds anticipation of the possibilities of the subject matter.
It soon becomes clear that she is talking about love, something which many people feel that they have experienced to a degree and can most definitely understand.
I feel that her techniques are very knowledgeable since performance poetry is presented to an audience, who need to want to listen to what you're saying - whether it's because it's what they believe in or because they know you, reeling them in is extremely important.
In this piece, Carrie owns the stage. She is small in frame and were she to walk past me in the street I probably wouldn't give her a second glance, but the inflections in her voice accompanied with her ability to know when to pause caused me to tune in and be unable to take my eyes off her.
In terms of my own poetry this is something that I will aim to achieve in the future.
The line "Dear Stranger, If you hear this and think it could be about you, please don't stop listening" instantly draws you in and to question yourself "Will this poem relate to me" "will it speak to me as a person".
In addition, the speaker pleads with the listener to just listen which builds anticipation of the possibilities of the subject matter.
It soon becomes clear that she is talking about love, something which many people feel that they have experienced to a degree and can most definitely understand.
I feel that her techniques are very knowledgeable since performance poetry is presented to an audience, who need to want to listen to what you're saying - whether it's because it's what they believe in or because they know you, reeling them in is extremely important.
In this piece, Carrie owns the stage. She is small in frame and were she to walk past me in the street I probably wouldn't give her a second glance, but the inflections in her voice accompanied with her ability to know when to pause caused me to tune in and be unable to take my eyes off her.
In terms of my own poetry this is something that I will aim to achieve in the future.
Brother- Stephany Mejia
BROTHER! BROTHER!
BROTHER give you headache
they make sister sick
BROTHER get on your neves
that you want to hit
they blame stuff on me
I say no
I never wish to have a brother
i rather have a sister
oh well
I have to have
Brother
there silly
there cool
and that
my brother
This poem actually made me laugh... It's really basic in terms of the word choices and lots of it is grammatically incorrect; I read it as being colloquial - I am unsure as to whether this was intentional - but it worked for me. The style reminded me of being a child and really wishing that I did not have to have a brother. Then there were the moments when we were really mischievous together, and would take the margarine from the fridge and use it to create a skating rink on the wooden kitchen floor. It was the latter part of the poem that evoked this for me - 'their silly, their cool'. This then inspired me to write something positive about our childhood.
BROTHER give you headache
they make sister sick
BROTHER get on your neves
that you want to hit
they blame stuff on me
I say no
I never wish to have a brother
i rather have a sister
oh well
I have to have
Brother
there silly
there cool
and that
my brother
This poem actually made me laugh... It's really basic in terms of the word choices and lots of it is grammatically incorrect; I read it as being colloquial - I am unsure as to whether this was intentional - but it worked for me. The style reminded me of being a child and really wishing that I did not have to have a brother. Then there were the moments when we were really mischievous together, and would take the margarine from the fridge and use it to create a skating rink on the wooden kitchen floor. It was the latter part of the poem that evoked this for me - 'their silly, their cool'. This then inspired me to write something positive about our childhood.
Confessions of a Bound Soul - Amanda Saveley
Brother, my brother,
How selfish was I
While you seemed to struggle,
I sat idly by
Brother, my brother
Yes, try as I might
I now realize
It was also my fight
Brother, my brother
Now look at your arm
It's cold and immovable
Lost all its charm
Brother, my brother
Now look at your leg
There's so much left missing
Yet not once did you beg
Brother, my brother
Though I lost more in mass
It is you far more haunted
By our mistakes in the past
Brother, dear brother
Listen when I say
I will stick by your side
Until this goes away
Brother, dear brother
Listen when I say
I will stick by your side
Until our final day
I found this on the poetry archive. I enjoyed reading it because I can relate to some the content such as 'While you seemed to struggled' 'I sat idly by'. Also, I thought the transition of 'brother' to 'MY brother' emphasised the importance of their relationship. however, I was not a fan of the blatancy of the poem or the continuous repetition of 'brother' as this did not leave much room for the reader to come to their own conclusions about it.
How selfish was I
While you seemed to struggle,
I sat idly by
Brother, my brother
Yes, try as I might
I now realize
It was also my fight
Brother, my brother
Now look at your arm
It's cold and immovable
Lost all its charm
Brother, my brother
Now look at your leg
There's so much left missing
Yet not once did you beg
Brother, my brother
Though I lost more in mass
It is you far more haunted
By our mistakes in the past
Brother, dear brother
Listen when I say
I will stick by your side
Until this goes away
Brother, dear brother
Listen when I say
I will stick by your side
Until our final day
I found this on the poetry archive. I enjoyed reading it because I can relate to some the content such as 'While you seemed to struggled' 'I sat idly by'. Also, I thought the transition of 'brother' to 'MY brother' emphasised the importance of their relationship. however, I was not a fan of the blatancy of the poem or the continuous repetition of 'brother' as this did not leave much room for the reader to come to their own conclusions about it.
Lists of different brands/foods/places etc
As part of the task last Monday, this was the list I generated. On the left are numerous things relative to my 'short-tempered' self and to the right is what I thought correlated better to my 'calm' persona. I didn't think too much about what I was writing... I pretty much just scribbled down the first thoughts that came into my head which I found interesting when I was reflecting.
Some of the 'short-tempered' results were Nike Dunks, Lynx, Eminem, Dr. Dre, Tupac, Boys in the Hood... All of which my older brother is a fan.
Whereas the list on the side of calm was far more specific to me – Pizza Express, Chicken Caesar Salad, Gwen Stefani’s Baby Perfume, Sparkling Mineral water and The Notebook film to mention a few.
From this, I instantly knew what kind of direction I was going to take my poem in, I just wasn’t sure what the content would consist of just yet.
I started thinking of ideas surrounding the conflict between my brother and I as well as the ways in which, despite our polar-opposite personalities, we always look out for each other. To help inspire me, I looked into a number of poems and performances on a similar subject.
Some of the 'short-tempered' results were Nike Dunks, Lynx, Eminem, Dr. Dre, Tupac, Boys in the Hood... All of which my older brother is a fan.
Whereas the list on the side of calm was far more specific to me – Pizza Express, Chicken Caesar Salad, Gwen Stefani’s Baby Perfume, Sparkling Mineral water and The Notebook film to mention a few.
From this, I instantly knew what kind of direction I was going to take my poem in, I just wasn’t sure what the content would consist of just yet.
I started thinking of ideas surrounding the conflict between my brother and I as well as the ways in which, despite our polar-opposite personalities, we always look out for each other. To help inspire me, I looked into a number of poems and performances on a similar subject.
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